Friday, August 30, 2019

Week 2 Story: Elephant and the Angry Ocean


 
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The elephant, although commonly portrayed in stories as being the wise soul, was my main character who turned out to be timid and foolish. The elephant traveled to a new environment and was scared to enter this new domain. 

One day, after days of traveling, an elephant found itself on new territory that he had never seen before- the beach. The elephant was used to dry, desert-like environments so he was very unsure of this new place. He was tired from all of the travelings he had done over the past few days, so he wandered up to the sand and although he was unsure, began to lay down for the night. The sky was dark at this point, so the elephant had no trouble closing his eyes to sleep.

As he was laying down he started to think about a story he had heard from a friend back home that there was a huge body of water in some places that had sand, that sometimes got angry and would start viciously flooding the towns. Although scared by the thought that might happen, the elephant was almost asleep until he heard huge crashing noises, one after another. He squinted his eyes to look, and just as he was able to make out what seemed like a body of water, a large wave crashed down onto him. He then heard a loud rumble from the sky and ran the opposite way as fast as he could.

As he passed other humans and animals he began to scream “The town is about to flood! Beware!”

The elephant kept running with fear in his eyes as another dog asked, “why are you running in a panic?”

The elephant stated, “I have no time to tell, the water is about to flood this whole town!”

The dog began to run next to him barking about the flood.

The loud rumbling noise was heard again right as the cheetah approached the elephant and the dog.

“What’s wrong, why are you guys so scared?” said the cheetah. 

“The flood is coming! The flood is coming!” cried the dog.

Soon, animal after animal began to join the group of scared running animals and caused the whole town to be sent into a panic. The residences in the town knew how dangerous flooding from the ocean could be, so they began to pack their stuff in preparation to evacuate.

Just then, the herd of animals ran into a flock of pelicans. 

“What is going on here?” asked the pelicans.

“The major flood is about to happen! I was sleeping on the sand when suddenly a large amount of water began to rise up and fell and crashed on me! I began to run and that made it angrier, so the whole thing began to make a loud rumbling noise!”

The wise pelicans began to howl with laughter and said “Silly elephant! That rumbling noise was just a thunderstorm about to happen! The ocean waves get larger whenever a storm occurs, you didn’t make anything angry.”

The elephant signed with relief and followed the pelicans, the wise animals of ocean-land, into a home so he would not be caught in the storm. One by one, the other animals returned home, relieved that no flood would be occurring that night.


Author's Note: I was inspired by the Anthology, "The Foolish, Timid Rabbitt". I loved the storyline, so used a similar plot, just with different characters and in a different setting. I used uncommon characters to make the plot less expected. 

Bibliography. "The Foolish, Timid Rabbitt" from Jakatas Tales by Ellen C. Babbitt. Web Source.

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3 comments:

  1. What I really like about your story is the twist with the characters. Making the elephant timid and afraid and the pelican wise and a sage is a nice change in the traditional dynamic. I wonder, did you consider other character dynamic changes when selecting the animals that the elephant ran into during his flight of hysteria? Also, why do you think the elephant was so scared? Was it simply exhaustion or was there something else in his character, personality, or history that lead him to be that way? It would be interesting to know more about his backstory. I'm also curious about the village itself. Are the people used to having elephants roaming around their homes? Does the pelican give out advice on a regular basis? Finally, I really like the image of the elephant on lying the beach about to fall asleep only to be shocked into a terrified sprint by a crashing wave.

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  2. Hi Adrienne! I really like you subverting the trope of elephants always being wise. The story reads really well, and I can really feel the fear of the elephant and the other characters coming through in the story. I agree with Dave -- I would like to know more about the elephant's backstory, even if it's just a small detail. One way to do this, while subverting another elephant trope, would be to incorporate "an elephant never forgets" into the story, maybe about his past or his experience at the ocean.

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  3. I was able to have my friend proofread and give me feedback about my story and here is what she had to say!

    I really enjoyed the idea behind the elephant being in the circus for it's whole life then is able to travel and see new things. I loved the fact that the elephant is gullible in this story unlike the traditional stereotype of elephants being wise. I think the story would be fun to add on to if the elephant was given more of a backstory. I think it would be cool to follow the elephant through his circus life and then his decision to break free to explore. Overall I really liked the story and found it to be fun to read.

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